The
amount of oil left for us could be only used about for 42 years. The natural
gas is about 50 years left. This lack of the natural resources made countries urge
to get more resources as they can. This desire, or maybe kind of uneasiness
they feel, makes conflicts between the countries. These conflicts could appear
as a kind of a war, or as an unstable relationship between the countries. As
time goes by, the amount of the fossil fuels will more decrease, the countries
will be more eager to get them, and finally, the more conflicts will be
engendered.
Of
course not all of the countries will have war with each other, but it is
possible for the wars to outbreak. Like the Artic Ocean dispute or the war
between Iraq and Afghanistan, these wars can happen again. The scarcity of the
fossil fuels could be a reason for the war, but the new natural resources
appearing these days could also be a reason for it too. For example, Methane
Hydrate is looming up as the new natural resource which could alternate the fossil
fuels. Because methane hydrate discharge less carbon hydrate than the oil, it
is better for the nature too. However, the reasons why this good resource could
cause the war, is because only five places are found to have the methane hydrate.
Then, like the disputes that we had for the oil, other disputes will happen to
get new resource.
Therefore,
because of our egoism and stupid actions, the world gave us the change, which
might threat ourselves, just like we had threatened the nature. Earth is just
giving us back the things that we had gave to them. It doesn’t mean that we
should not use all the fossil fuels or scientific technologies, but at least we
should know about the problems we have, and try to change our actions. We should
change before the changes will come.

I can see that you spent a lot of time thinking about the prompt and developing your points & ideas. I really like your logical & closely related paragraphs. While the content being a bit popular, they are perfectly organized. The points flow and expand from one to another, and each of them are well-explained.
답글삭제Dear My Lovely Haeun:)
답글삭제Intro was really good, and the contents of the essay were well organized.
I can see the effort you put on this job!
Well, you wrote more about negative future, the problems we face now.
It would be better if you add some more future we can expect on the other side.
I loved your frog photo and the essay, though!!("That's my girl!XD")
From Your Lovely Lynne:)
Hey there xD
답글삭제This is a great essay for sure :)
I liked how you briefly introduced how the situations are these days and make predictions based on the things you said.
I was a bit confused while reading this, though.. First you started with examples from the IT industry, then wars caused by the lack of resources, and the example of methane hydrate all of a sudden, and ended with the "we should change" thing.. It might've been better if you just kinda made clear where you were going with this essay..
So yeah.
Nice job!